Just Perfect.

by Megann Lee   Aug 2, 2006


Blue eyes as bright as an October sky.
A hidden story they seem to mask.
Her lips refuse to part to reveal the stories.
Of the perfection she just doesn't have.

She can't seem to grasp the fact of why.
Her parents yearn for her to be Just perfect.
Another image, of her deceased sister.
The perfect child that they once had.

She stands silently staring into the mirror.
Of what she was like, and now of what she is.
She shrieks looking back at herself horrified.
Her beauty she once seemed to carry, is washed from her face.

All her grace she once had earned.
Comes crashing down around her feet.
Her clever wittiness she once created.
Lingers within her hating mind.

The evil runs thick, it's in her blood.
It controls her brain she doesn't get what she's done is wrong.
She's just perfect, like her parents wanted.
As a smile forms on her dead like face.

She lifts her arm, points, aims and counts back from ten.
The numbers fly back to one.
As she pulls the trigger back with ease.
A loud crack snapping back.

One, Two, Three, Then Four.
The sound echo's in the room.
A lingering smell of smoke.
The gun has left behind.

"I'm just perfect" her now parting lips scream.
The gun raising to her temple.
As the process repeats.
One last, click, along with one loud crack.

Three bodies remain.
Just like a an old horror movie portrays.
Of a girl who wants perfect enough.

©Megan - 2006 - Title Contest.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    Blue eyes as bright as an October sky.
    A hidden story they seem to mask.
    Her lips refuse to part to reveal the stories.
    Of the perfection she just doesn't have.

    Great opening stanza, but I don't think the rest quite matches up to it. Seems like you concentrated a lot on the story but not on the quality of the language and techniques in the poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Wow! this poem really caught my attention, it was kind of like reading a scary story, it gave me chills. You did an excellent job on this poem, and even though it didnt rhyme it flowed amasingly.

    Great work

    --Steph

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    I like this poem, is is a little dark but full of emotion. great job

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    Very well thought out poem. Good work on it. 5/5!!
    I'm not sure if in the last line of the last stanza you meant "wants" or "wasn't"... cause you wrote "wants" && maybe it's just me, but i think "wasn't" makes more sense..but i guess both could work. This poem was eerie and at the same time sad. it made me think about perfection and what it really is. Great peice of work!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I loved this stanza, I can totally relate to it:

    All her grace she once had earned.
    Comes crashing down around her feet.
    Her clever wittiness she once created.
    Lingers within her hating mind.

    I liked the theme of your poem, and your word choice was beautiful.

    Good job!

    Keep writing.

    XoXo
    Gaby