A great poem as always
you have shoed your great talent in this poem as well
It s a good poem. i give it 5/5

WOw. Very dark poem. This was awesome! I loved all the short lines, I thought it gave the poem alot more strengh. Excellent job. Keep it up!! 5/5

Natalie``

Ooh very nice job. The short lines gave it a really brutal edge. I loved the raw and almost jagged flow this one had.

Wow. It's very dark lol. But I liked how you expressed yourself in this poem, and the flow was good. Keep it up! =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

This was a pretty dark poem...it was really good so i gave it a 5/5. I liked how you repeated some lines so they stood out. It was nicely written:):)

I love anything that makes me think...and this does just that. incredible.

I love anything that makes me think...and this does just that. incredible.

Wonderful job. It was kind of creepy feeling. It takes alot to make me feel that way, but the poem was very visual. Wonderful! Loretta 5/5

Love this one. It's flow was well and it was absolutely amazing. Keep up the wonderful work Hun.

Ok....that was pretty dang dark! it was great how u repeated lines again later in the poem. it kind of made it sound like it could be a song from judas priest or something. i liked the short lines again in this one. 5/5

I really like this poem. I think that the short lines work well for it.

Black tears,
Shredding your face

^ One of my favorite lines^ great imagery

Broken at heart,
I have never heard that expression and it is one that will stick with me forever!

OOOOH dark and very strong. I usually dont get into these but you make me want to!! great job!!!

This is strong, powerful and perfect. Well done and although it was a little eerie it was still great. Keep it up :)

Good visual i likedit keep it up

THIS is the best poem, i printed this poem out and i showed all my friends,, dont worry, i told them you wrote it. GREAT JOB, please keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Woah, really good, the flow was fantastic, good write