Not bad not bad at all!!
I really like the ending part.

This is really good some poems have this thing about them that no one should say how to improve because it will spoil their work.

this is one of them poems its YOUR work and only YOU should suggest things to fix it otherwise it wont be your poem if you know what im sayin

lovely poem though :):) keep it up xx

would you comment on some of my poems please i like as much feedback as i can get :):) thnx xxx alex xxx