Wow!!! such a powerful poem, and so true, it does happen everyday, your poem was very well written, and i could fee the sadness of the young character! erm... no crique..just help;
in the 3rd stanza, 3rd line, you wrote 'know' i believe it is supposed to read 'now' And also in the 5th stanza 4th line you wrote 'lining'... is it supposed to be laying? but other than that great poem :)
please read and comment on my poems.. rhank you... kirsty palmer xx