Wow.. short, but dark... i liked the way you wrote it, very catching... great write keep it up! 5/5..please read and comment on my poems, thank you .. kirsty palmer xx

Do you worship the devil are you from the dark side lol wow bit short agai but good i liked it anyways

I couldnt get into this poem. there wasnt anything to pull me into it i guess...
instead of... "Clap of Thunder"
try... "The Roaring Thunder Clashed" or something to draw the reader at the beggining of the poem.

keep it up :D and good job :)

~Terra

I liked it i just wised it was longer

I liked it more....
would have liked it to be longer, though
i liked the topic though; all apocolypsy and stuff haha
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~HazE

Good imagery and excellent language 'clandestine whispers' - that is beautiful. But pleeeeease dont be lazy about punctuation. Its easy but it makes sooo much difference. look:

Clap of thunder.
Clandestine whispers,
masked by
the decieving smiles.
Slowly gives way
to the end of the world.
Return to where I belong
my Master, my Lord, Satan.