Interesting - Good structure.
Thanks for the comment.
Im going to stick by what i said in my poem but its good that you voiced your opinion.
[Although Goths dont try to be weird, Most kids that you see today who claim to be goth are just little kids trying to look like vampires - they've ruined the gothic reputation x_x]
Oh well.
Still your comment is appreciated.
And like i said - I like this poem.
Carry on writing.