The end of this poem really makes me feel more about the poem itself lol i really liked it but there one was verse

You broke my heart,
You made me cry.
I played my part.
Now tell me why.

this was too short for the poem i think

maybe this may go there

' Why on earth did you break my heart,
What was the need to make me cry,
When you know i played my part,
All i want to know is why.'

i duno jus a suggestion it was a good poem though
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would you comment on my poems please i like as much feedback as possible thnx XxX alex XxX

Wow.. such a well writen heartfelt poem, it flowed well, and was really emotional, loved the ending, i think that you should go back and edit it.. as where you used ( ' ) the apostraphy it comes up canA//A!t or someting like that.. other than that well done 5/5..keep it up .. please read and comment on my poems, thanks kirsty palmer xx

I think your work is great... not meaning to sound patronising or anything... but u do write extremely well for someone so young... the poem felt very real ... I liked it...
keep it up!