Going To Fly

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Aug 3, 2006


--I tried a different rhyming scheme..

Sitting in the middle of a halo,
Made of people watching my every move,
Gazing simply at me with malice filled eyes,
To these people I have something to prove,
I'm nothing but a trapped angel inside.

Remember that I have galant wings,
To spread up far and wide,
And once I cut off all your strings,
This angel is going to fly.
This angel is going to fly.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wonderful job on this. i like the rhyming. greatly written. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 18 years ago

    by King of The Elements

    You r really good with imagery and flow keep it up but the rhyming scheme u tried worked for me

  • 18 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    Remember that I have galant wings,
    To spead up far and wide,
    And once I cut off all your strings,
    This angel is going to fly.
    This angel is going to fly.

    awesome except on spelling mistake on spread!!! this angel will truly fly

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Ooo. Nice flow, once again. Emotion was really good. It made the reader think what exactly you're thinking, and makes the poem what exactly you meant it to be. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Short but sweet(ish). I find angel cliche but this had a somewhat uplifting feel to it. No real complaints for this one!

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