by only_me Aug 3, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
You think that i don't have a heart, because i didn't cry outside like you did. |
by Nix
First of all this isn't the poem this is a short story. It isn't bad but it could be better. Topic is excellent but you could use some metaphors to make stronger atmosphere. This piece could be longer and emotions aren't greatly expressed. This one needs many improving. |