Omg! I love this, Amen sister, this is so true

heehee. you already know my thoughts I wont repeat them

I can't GIVE you constructive critisism. I can give you consturctive COMPLIMENTS!! You write perfectly, and every time I write, I hope to write more like you!! 5/5, once again!!
PV

This poem sucks. There is your criticism .Aha, I'm joking. I like this poem, but I'm afraid to tell you =/, I don't want to be strangled.

The topic was an interesting one that many people don't write on, but the title with that 'call out to poems and quotes writers' part made me lose interest. The 'Sugar Coated' title was the reason why I read it.

Anyways...the flow of this poem is off at sometimes, but I was also reading it pretty quickly..I think it was because of the 'infuration' of the words, I don't know.

It's hard to give constructive criticism on a poem that is about it.

Ha ha ha! I'm sorry... ok... no laughing no omg this is brilliant...... ok.... well here's some point's from me! *grins* and I always give good points lol

1. Maybe break it up into more stanzas cause I got a bit dizzy reading that lol

2. Try not 2 dis your audience 2 much they could get offended LOL... jokes.... but I thought your wording was really good just try to make it flow a bit more

lol that's all I have to say! it was imaginative, controversal, in your face totally beautiful... not the best poem I've ever read that would be MINE... lol jokes again... it was very nicely written hun! keep it up Ruthie xoxo

As a poem, I don't think it's great, but the controversial aspect you put in it makes it interesting. Sometimes it's like your telling a story, not writing a poem, so try to make it flow a bit easier. Good use of words, an interesting subject and a superb ending
5/5

Wow, very nicely written Hun. I loved it.