Wow! I really liked that. I haven't seen a poem written in that style in a long time. You have talent, keep it up.

Jessie

Wow girl thats so sad
your letting your feelings come out in there lines well done
sometimes its hard
that i know

but keep wrighting you do have talent

lana

Unusual format but great style with it. It clearly shows how you are pouring your feelings into the writing.
It was really sad and the disjointed emotion came through well in the disjointed style.

A poem that reminds me of a person I once new when I was about 16, there is a wonderful understanding that can come from a life and thoughts like that if you can find it. Another wonderful poem, that captures thoughts and emotions brilliantly. Chris