Ooooh that was a really deep poem, excellent writing 5/5 keep up the talent hunny and life will eventually get better

xoxoxoxo Lucy

There were perhaps a few lines that I couldn't quite understand, but I still liked the imagery.. I mean, that it was very real, and, well, I like to say, it played an evil seduction in the mind.

"Tissues, and band-aid wrappers litter the floor and night table."

It was too tired to rhyme, as though it dragged its feet in its depression, but still said what it had to...
This poem was different in many ways, even though the cutting was cliche there was a more realistic aspect of it..
Oh well, I'm not sure what else to say.
Good work.

//T.L.//

Have to agree with previous comments that it does seem to plod a little but it fits with the theme so that is ok I guess.
Yes the theme is a little cliche but you put real feeling into it and it was almost like watching a film play out.
So despite the flaws I still give you five for expression and imagery.

Cliche or no cliche, I thought this was a excellent poem. You added real emotion to it, and it was very well written. Excellent job with description as well. 5/5 Keep up the great work