This is really good some poems have this thing about them that no one should say how to improve because it will spoil their work.

this is one of them poems its YOUR work and only YOU should suggest things to fix it otherwise it wont be your poem if you know what im sayin

lovely poem though :):) keep it up xx

would you comment on some of my poems please i like as much feedback as i can get :):) thnx xxx alex xxx

I really liked this poem it was good keep it up and keep writing and im sure ill keep reading :):):)

plz vote some of my poems plz and giv me some feedback thnx xxx alex xxx :):):)