You leave me breaaaaathlessss lol. Sorry i just had to. That was uber radtastic dear. xD

I liked this one, it was really good. good thoughts and well written.
the only thing that put me off was the third line in the third stanza, it was too long, and rocked the flow, but overall very good.
love Tara-Kay

I'm speechless. I'm not speaking flattery when I say this, I'm speaking truth: You are an AMAZING poet.

I only caught one mistake, and that is in the last stanza. I think it should be "streams of lies cloud" not could :)