by Lynn
Hey there, umm your poem is really great! You're really talented! keep it up! and check my poems if you feel like it :) |
by BrokenMisery
Its a sad poem and well written. I don't like your topic area simply because its been very over done in the past. Also deriving your title from the last line can sometimes ruin the ending. It was a good job, you did it without forcing any rhymes which is really hard in that sort of structure. A good job, keep writing and best of luck. |
by HOLLY ARMER
Very well written, Mom. I like the part where the father kicks her lifeless body, it adds a boost of hatred toward the character...if that makes any sense. I guess what I'm saying is it shows that the father never cared. |
by HOLLY ARMER
Oh and don't change the title. It's awesome! |
This is a excellent poem |
A Chilling Poem.. Very Emotive and Amazing, and Just Scary. and Sad. i dont know who gave it less than a 5.. the only thing i could find not perfect was the use of dirty twice in one line, Lol. but truly very sad poem.. |
by Gem
That was so sad and it didn't sound forced at all. |
by Midnight Sun
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by ReBecca
This is great. I've spent the last half hour going through alot of your stuff and I think you are extremly talented. I look forward to reading more. |
by Mihaela
I like this poem a lot.Congratulations,you have done a great work.Best regards,Michelle XxX |