Night is upon

by Lenny   Aug 6, 2006


From passive grey,
To a dimmer tone,
With one glance its gone,
Blackest black,
The day melts,
From drizzling rain,
And somber skies,
Melts into night,
The time of slumber,
From that grey,
To coal rich hues,
Light is engulfed,
By darkness reign,
Night is upon.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is really good some poems have this thing about them that no one should say how to improve because it will spoil their work.

    this is one of them poems its YOUR work and only YOU should suggest things to fix it otherwise it wont be your poem if you know what im sayin

    lovely poem though :):) keep it up xx

    would you comment on some of my poems please i like as much feedback as i can get :):) thnx xxx alex xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    I like it..

    The day melts into,

    I'd remove 'into' personally and it'll flow better. I'm not sure how much I like the repetition of the last line; usually repetition is used on a powerful line or to reintroduce the idea in a new conext -- I'm just not sure if it adds anything to say it twice. anyway goodjob as always

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