I like it..

The day melts into,

I'd remove 'into' personally and it'll flow better. I'm not sure how much I like the repetition of the last line; usually repetition is used on a powerful line or to reintroduce the idea in a new conext -- I'm just not sure if it adds anything to say it twice. anyway goodjob as always

This is really good some poems have this thing about them that no one should say how to improve because it will spoil their work.

this is one of them poems its YOUR work and only YOU should suggest things to fix it otherwise it wont be your poem if you know what im sayin

lovely poem though :):) keep it up xx

would you comment on some of my poems please i like as much feedback as i can get :):) thnx xxx alex xxx