I like dis poem lots..
its so cute..

Sweet poem, but it can be better. Here's my critique:

-Recheck your spelling
-Please capitalize your "I".
-Try to even out the lines so it flows better
-Use fill words less such as "I", a, etc.
-Add more imagery and expand your vocab, don't use the same words over again.

Hope that helped^-^

Lovely poem :):):)