Hm. Well this was sweet. Maybe you should correct the I\'m's though.

I'm watching a bleak red sky.
I see your face in the clouds.
"please come back", I cry.
Please help me, please save me.......

Lovely ending. It would be nice to have it a bit longer, though it's okay. Excellent to read.
5/5

xx.N-G-C-S.xx

Now htis poem of yours really shows emotion and stress about the loss of a loved one and you conveyed so much meaning here well done :):):) nice work xxx alex xxx