Poemd like this shouldnt be dissed and people shouldnt say how to improve.

Because its your poem and comes from the heart if someone else tells you what to write on it then it wouldnt be your poem would it if you know what i mean

lovely poem though very detailed xx

would you look at my poems please thnx xxx alex xxx

Wow.. such a sad and poerful poem, i loved it,and it is soo true! i lvoed the 'moral' at the end, great write and keep it up... 5.5! please read and commen on my poems..tanks..Kirsty Palmer xx