by Lenny Aug 7, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
new love
When you are near me, |
by Ike Dizzle
This is a great poem. It's better than what I'm doing write now. 5/5 |
by Drew Gold
I liked this a lot and the imagery was the best I've seen from you. Awesome stuff. My only crits would be to remove unnecessary commas -- that's kind of a pet peeve of mine about line breaks, but thats a personal thing. Also the second iteration of 'your sky of distortion' says 'Or' -- Not sure if that's intentional but something I noticed. |