I liked this a lot and the imagery was the best I've seen from you. Awesome stuff. My only crits would be to remove unnecessary commas -- that's kind of a pet peeve of mine about line breaks, but thats a personal thing. Also the second iteration of 'your sky of distortion' says 'Or' -- Not sure if that's intentional but something I noticed.

My fav parts were between "And the rain,"
and
"Like an artist gone completely insane,"

Sweet!!

This is a great poem. It's better than what I'm doing write now. 5/5
-Kakashi