Love the flow of this. Couch dreams is very nice. I envisioned it all very clearly. You do very well with the repetition. At the beginning you use first person then at the end switch to third. I can see how it works, referring to the ailed stranger (from the rain/couch dreams Point of view) but just something maybe to think about. I liked it

Great job. I like this. Oh yeah you're not the only one without a social life lol. 5/5
-Kakashi