Hmmm. I liked it. It did ryhme but in some spots it stopped rhyming. I still gave it a five cause I liked it in general, even if the rhyming wasn't consistant through-out the entire poem. Very well written piece of work though.

I think this is touching.. great work!

Hey well not all poems exactly need to rhyme and stuff and thats the fun of it!! Its for you to think!! LOL anyways I like your poems And keep it up!! Ill put some new poems up and comment whenever!!
God BLess!!