Loretta --
Have I mentioned that you`ve got a beautiful name? Not sure if I have, but, you do. =D
As for your poem, it was really good! I`m not really liking all these two line stanzas, they just don`t hold enough emotion, and the reader can`t really grasp the intent. But you seemed to have done a pretty good job here, so, 5/5.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

I can grasp the intent perfectly, hunny.. the problem being that I have about another thousand lines after yours finish about how my lover's dawn ends, and he goes back to his wife!! lol.. I found this to be amazing, for that reason.. Maybe I'm just too emotional to be reading others work today!! Very very well done. xx