Oooohhh I liked that. such vivid language, mmmm a joy to read, the description was just so rich. I love it, its so dark and the flow is mmmmm! No crits sorry... Man I suck at crits...

Holy crap! This was totally awesome... I was VERY rapped up in the entire thing...GREAT JOB! 5/5!
~Jules

Wow, this is kool job man. Keep writing.

*writes text review on poem* Yeah no crits! I love the ending, and the occasional use of rhyme. Beautiful!