This is pretty good. i like it. but for a lil bit of critisim i think you should make the lines a little bit longer.. but thats all up to u. i ilke it tho. even tho its short. keep up the good poems
take care
luve angie

Thanx for the comment and 4 the critisim it all helps..lol...o and they reason its so short is bc its a couplet

Very good. Kinda short, but that's good too, I guess. :) You did good! Keep writing!

~~Spanish367