by stacy Aug 8, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
sensual love
Driven by the impatient curiosity of the lips |
by Letty
I actually liked this poem and its meaning. The flow was a little rocky though. You also need to add punctuation to help it flow better. There are also misspelled words and some sentences scream for capitalization. Over-all the poem is good, I wouldn't say excellent because it needs a bit of work. How long have you been writing again? If this is beginners work I say that you did great. Keep up the good work. You'll be on your way in no time at all. : ) |
by stacy
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