Wow i was guna dis u for writing bad shit like that but the endin made me giggle lol wow lol it was really good and it was very mind twisting lol i loved it
the poem was good :):):):) will ya comment on some of my poems please i like as much feedback as poss thnx hunni xxxx alex xxxx

Wow Bill, awesome poem. It had me going to the end. Great story. Glad u hadn't snuck up on me like that, you may be hurting.lol 5/5 Always Loretta

You've done it again Bill ....Got my heart all pounding, scared half to death with the imagery this poem created in the beginning....lol
Then ending it with a twisting final stanza that made me smile and go .....WHEWWW...
You really had me going for a bit there, my friend .
I remember reading a poem of yours many months ago that was somewhat written with a twisting ending as this one......dang it I should have been prepared this time...lol
You shall not fool me again, my friend, next time I shall be prepared.....LMAO....
Wonderfully written poem Bill, that kept me at the edge of my seat .

Bill my friend, you took me for a really scary ride. Yet there was passion in this poem. It seemed to be a mixture of darkness then erotica. I thought that was creative. Very beautiful ending.

Yowza! Iz alwayz did lik a litle roll play...iz yuz married? cuz im jus sayin, yuz got some spunk n i sur like the way yuz called it a gerber, iz neva herd it called dat befo.