Hey..

That was touching what you wrote..

Some feelings i found from it what I feel by myself too..

and the name in the end..David..

Almost made me cry..

Viv

Another great one. I loved how with rhyming you really expressed how you felt

U r a remarkable writer...i love how everything u write almos anyone in the world can relate to....good job
andi

Soo touching n deep!...great work on this 1!!...the rhymes,descriptions-just remarkable,excellent!!..i can relate too!!
loved it!!...5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Ahaaaaa.. true love shines from your words. nicely done. 5/5

I love it, way to go! I'm more for sad and dark poems...but I really like that one. I give it a 5!

I liked the message in this poem it was very sweet and touching. But the way it was written, was a little off in some areas. The flow seemed forced, and a little to direct. And the writing its self needs a little bit more work.

just some of the basics (and make sure that all of your I are capatilized, it really takes the reader out of the power of the poem)
Id = I'd
its = it's

nice message though, just try and work on your technique a little bit.