Hey I actually really liked this poem, and enjoyed the fact that I had to read it a few times before I could really get the feel for it.. to me it is about the calm before the storm, and the relief afterwards knowing you had control of that relief.. i think there was a lot of emotions and feelings in this poem, and i really enjoyed reading this.. great job 5/5 xx

I do understand this. I have been there, felt those emotions. It takes me back a long time. I think you did a great job. 5/5 Loretta

Wow.....i liked it alot......its sorta scares me though.....a lil but i liked it a 5/5 4 me !! keep on writing!!

I loved it, you really have a talent for writing exactly how you feel down!!! great job!!!

xoxo Lucy

Now this poem had different imagery, which is a good thing, but you might want to comb it through for reptitive words. Like is a word that I often stumble over and to me it messed with an otherwise decent flow. You also have the word rolling twice in two sentences close together.

You have rolling as in present tense but later on was which is past tense. Try and keep to one tense to not confuse your readers.

Check for grammar (Im should be I'm) and using sentences such as "It feels so good" which could be made into soemthing much more descriptive.

All in all an alright poem.

Wow. So random...sounds like me lol. Very good flow, I thought, and I liked the randomness of it =P 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

GREAT POEM! 5/5

i loved how you did this:

Close my eyes and thoughts begin
The pain that raped me rip beyond my fingers
Im living this nightmare again
But it feels so good to lose control
To finally have the one night stand again
To feel the power rush through me
To feel the pulse in my veins
A smile creases into my face knowing I won tonight