Wow..was i looking at the same poem as the other readers?what's up with this low rating?This poem deserves to be in the 4's and 5's. I loved it hun, it was a really good poem. I think this could be more suited in the sad love catagory, but thats your decision=D
I loved the flow and the beautiful words, it was amazing;)

Aww, this is such a sad poem Jess. I can't believe how mean people are rating this poem so low. It really does deserve a better rating than this.

That was a really touching poem and was written really well. Well done I loved it you deff have talent!
xx

Thats so sad...but so easy to relate to...great poem!....i read some of your other poems, with out commenting sorry, and your a talented writer...keep it up....

Awwwi loved this poem..it was great i can relate alot to it..your flow and rhythm was great..you expressed your emotions beautifully...excellent piece 5/5

Aww.. that is such a sad but beautifully written poem. I like the abab rhyme scheme and it flowed very well. I really liked the way that you ended it, it seemed to fit perfectly with the poem. Great job on this! 5/5

Great Poem! 5/5 You deserve no less. It flowed smoothly and the rhyming was amazing! my fav staza is:

Treasuring each other and their love
Her distraught heart was starting to crack
They shared one last kiss as he floated above
And their souls slowly faded to black..

Great Job 5/5 Keep up the Great work!

Aww, that was very very sad, Jessy! You worded it marvellously, as always, and the ending was so well written.I loved it! It was one of the best heartbreaking poems ive read, great job! Keep it up! 5/5
Best wishes,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

Aw, wow Jessy. This was so sad. Very well done though, I've noticed you've been doing a rhyme scheme lately. Very nice indeed. =P I loved this one though, as I do with all your work. Tehe. Keep it up!! 5/5

Natalie``

P.S. HAPPY BIRTHDAYYYYYYYYYY. Ily.

I really like the progression in this poem of the story from light to dark. And I think you did a great job with the ABAB rhyming scheme. In fact, I think it's great, and has quite the potential to be a little longer. Consider expanding! ;)

Awh. I loved the wording and structural flow of it. Very sad. I loved it. I thought it was going to make me tear up.

Ohh.. And Happy Birthday? :]

This is really sad, but amazing. i could imagine the last kiss, and the way you wrote the whole piece was great. great job.

Wow,

this poem is awesome!

so sad and expressive!

exceellent write jess

keep up the good work and I shall keep reading!!

from sophie :)

p.s. thanx for the comment!

Awsome.
You're really good.
Loved it. 5/5.

jess - 3vO7

What a tragic story. That's really very sad. I love the last line. Great job 5/5

~ Tina

Wow very sad poem I like the flow and each lines says a great messege for me I like how you write this one and this is a great poem keep it up man nice piece

Geneross

Pretty good, it could be in the lost love section too. Great way to end a poem.

Not sure if I left a comment and if so sorry deary.

I like this poem. The flow was great and you are so wonderful at putting images with your poems into someones mind. It was really eligently written and an easy read. Very sad yet true at the same time. I think their are plenty of people whom are not here that could relate.. I loved it. :]

Oh my godd i love this poem its so inteanse...its awesome...i love your writing i read a couple of your other poems..but its amazing..keep writing it makes me happi..Lolz 5/5
♥Kiki♥

OMGSH! you are very talented. i love this poem. it's very.. expressive. you're an excellent poet. you deserve an award. keep up the beautiful poems. you're an inspiration to us all. :D

Love Claire. x o x o