My Nightmare Was {her}

by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere   Aug 9, 2006


**Okay this wasnt suppose to make very much sense again. But hope you like it!**

A thirst for blood
A hunger for death
A picture of hate
Is welling up in my eyes
I wanted you
But it was {her}
That won your heart
Sleepless nights
Unheard voices begin to tell me
Everything about {her}
That I am not
My Nightmare Is {her}
Every night I lay my head down
Lost at mind during the day
Thinking up desiring plans
To get {her} out of the picture
So I finally can have you
As courage climb inside of me
I take that gun
And put it to {her} head
I press the trigger
And loud gunshot follows a click
Blood soaking down {her} clothes
{Her} eyes fluttering as they swiftly close
I became {her} nightmare and...
My Nightmare Was {her}

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  • 18 years ago

    by Antares

    I love an angry poem once in awhile.

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashla

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow. Dark poem lol. I liked it though. A lot. I could feel the hate in it! It's just how I felt when I wrote one of my explicit poems hehe =) Hmm...Well, I hope you don't really feel this way...it's horrible =(

    Anyways...back to the poem...flow was good, topic was good, and from the heart. =) Great job. Keep it up! =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I honestly don't know why you put "this wasn't suppose to make very much sense." Firstly the reader can interpret it in their own way, and believe me 9 times out of 10 they will in one way or another. Secondly, why write and post something as a poem that doesn't make sense?
    Anyway...to me this seemed as if you were thinking through in your head about your emotions and anger and what you would do to {her} given the chance.
    It's somewhat cliche in the sense of teenage angst wanting to hurt someone for revenge, but you got your message across well nevertheless.
    The line "As courage climb inside of me" should be "As courage climbs inside of me."
    Keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by WitherBlisterBurnandPeel

    Really descriptive, I loved the ending
    great work

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