Foretold

by Christie   Aug 10, 2006


Standing forlorn in the falling rain,
Emotions laden on a fragmented heart,
Existing no more for the divine plan laid,
Staring till comes the inevitable dark.

Joined only by warmth of a familiar other,
Walking across the jagged edge of ice,
Steel eyes pursue a definite shudder,
Her heart, his hand, the twist so concise.

Standing, watching the waves unfold,
With moments of nothing, her heart hollow,
Stone rocks under her, freezing ice cold,
He opens his mouth, so purposeful, yet slow.

Omitted, "I don't love you, I never will",
"I live for you" she said, her emotions; controlled,
He sneered, said "Find someone else, there's time still",
But the death of her had just been foretold.

© Christie 2006

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** This poem couldn't be any less true to my own life. But whats a poet if they can't write from a perspective not their own? =)

Also, its a dark poem, not always meant to be understood. If this is beyond your comprehension, feel free to message me and i will explain. =) Sometimes its just better to write a poem that not everyone will understand.

Please rate and comment, much appreciated and always returned. =D

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  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    OMG! I LOVE THIS! xD I really did love it! ^_^ It was terrific!

    [Steel eyes pursue a definite shudder,
    Her heart, his hand, the twist so concise.]
    ^^My favourite part. Oh me gee. This is one of the best dark poems I've read ever! xD The flow was great, the rhymes were superb, the vocab was well done, and the imagery was excellent! Lol. I don't have enough words to describe it. >.< Great write. 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by flip05

    Wow thats really deep.... i feel u, lol wish i can write sumtin like that keep it up 5/5 - flip05 =)

  • 18 years ago

    by Oceansoul

    Very well done, flows well and the rhyme works very well aswell
    it is indeed not 100% clear what it's exactly about, but that's indeed sometimes very good in poetry and takes nothing away from the quality of the work
    so, i'd say ,make more of these :)
    keep it up :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Willow

    WOW! so full of emotion. u've got telent my friend. i like it. 5/5 ur good.
    keep it up.
    love willow xxoo

  • 18 years ago

    by Vampyric Princess

    Wow! i love it!, it's soo true kike you said, and it's deep too!^^