Life (Lanturne)

by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ   Aug 10, 2006


----------Life
--------Helped
-----Start Our New
------Established
---------Love

*The Lanturne is a five-line verse shaped like a Japanese lantern with a syllabic pattern of one, two, three, four, one.*

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  • 18 years ago

    by swill

    Well, it encapsulates how your love is strong and is bounded by life....and it does so very elegantly and prettily! well done on this one!
    although one suggestion could be that instead of established (wich sounds a little technical) try to come up with a word that is a little more poetic...but i know its hard...matching the syllables and all...lol...well done on the write. you have potential
    dhaval...

  • 18 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Cute *5/5*
    MandiexXxOx

  • 18 years ago

    by Ye Seul

    This is very interesting style of writtin..i like it and i think the words flowed pretty well eventhough it was really short! 5/5 GREAT JOB~

  • 18 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    I have never read apoem like this before, but I really really liked it...It was so simple and yet it said so much in so few words, amazing poem, well done =0)

    Muc love Sabrina

  • 18 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    There are only three syllables in established.

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