Very interesting. i thought i got the point in soem bits but lost it again every now and then. nice work xox

Your imagry never ceaces to amaze me Emma. i love this poem, and marvel at the maturity of your work.

Ruby

Woah....great use of vocabulary! you used some great detailing words. excellent work...yet again. 5/5

There hearts black and dead,

[ I think that should be "their" if I'm not mistaken. ]

Again, you've got a great ending in this piece, I'm usually not that good at making great endings, they always seem to drag on. But you're great at it. Keep it up!

Natalie``

Wow. your good at writing poems. Thanks for the comment. I hope you have had a good life and would like to talk to you if u want. well write me back and nice poems.
~*Babie Girl*~