That's unbelievable. I love the word choice. I immediately imagined this poem as a song. Great job 5/5

- Thanks for reading my poem -

~ Tina

Nice poem, i mean so nice..
exellent job with the word choice, it is so deep
keep up the great job/5/5

Wow thts really good u must b good.....i lik it alot!! a 5/5!!

You are sooooo talented! This poem is really powerful and deep I am really impressed. Keep it up. I have found another person to add to my favourites!!!

Wow.. taleee, you are getting soo good.. i bet you could get your work published if you tried.. this was amazingly sad.. your descriptions make it seem so real.. i cringe as i read.. wonderful work as usual! 5/5

Wow, Nat (haha I think I write that at the start of all your comments too)

That was a really good poem, you put a lot of thought and effort into it. You described everything really well, and you chose the right words. Most of your description came using similies, which is something I have noticed you have been doing lately. Your poetry has matured over a short period of time. Awesome stuff!!!

Your favourite SMAWCE Brother.

Woah really great poem I like this
The way you write this one is so different (mean I like the sttyle the flow the words you use here the word feed me up are simple but great) you place them in a great position well done 5/5

geneross

Wow. this is a really powerful write. Your vocab is so rich and the imagery and flow are perfect.
PLEASE keep posting we need more poems like this.
10/10

This was a very powerful poem. i am very discouraged that you wont be posting anymore. you are a very very very good writer. im sure you hear that alot...but its true. i so hope you will continue to write although you wont post. your work is amazing, meaningful, and always full of life. dont stop doing what your doing.

keep on keepn' on miss murder.

Wow.. This also has so much depth to it, it's amazing.. It just really spoke to me. It's different from any poem I've ever read; I just loved it. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I really like this poem Hun. I loved the wording it was amazing. It flowed beautifully too. :] Great Write.

Greath Job, this is an amazing poem! Keep up the awesome work, my fav stanza is:
Flashing brewing lightening strikes vessels,
Risen blood streams revealing bitter truth,
Powered movements rejecting what is right,
Stealing untold memories saved by youth.
great job 5/5

Hey darl i really like the way uve structured this. some powerful lines. very well written. good job expressin urself. xx

Not bad, this isn't my favorite of yours but it's still good. I don't know exactly what it is about this poem, but it doesnt seem to have the same flare I guess you could call it as your other ones.

Not bad, this isn't my favorite of yours but it's still good. I don't know exactly what it is about this poem, but it doesnt seem to have the same flare I guess you could call it as your other ones.

Excellent word choice. The flow was excellent. 5/5

Well i already commented on this one soo good job!!!!!!!!!! =)

Natalie to be honest.
This is my favourite from the two I have read so far.
its descriptiveness is so....descriptive...lol
its perfect
you should have 45 '5s' instead of what most have given.
You should be SO proud.
~Emah
5/5

Numbing fewer sensations from the past,
Countless shivers reminding all the wrong,
Unknown numbers surfacing their final peak,
Ticking until pounding thoughts move along.

^^ LOVELY PART. The depth and emotion are brilliant. The flow is amazing as well. You are very good at poetry =)