It was pretty good., but your rythm and flow were off.

I loved how you express yourself...strong emotions..and most can relate.

good write 4/5

Thanks for what u wrote....but u r talking about the rythm that i don't have, don't u think that in thoughts its not about the rythm its about the emotions u r trying to express so if u concentrate on the rythm u won't be able to express ur emotions...believe me coz i've been writing thoughts for 6 years now....& i'm english is my foreign language so give me a break....lool...& thats why i'm better in arabic