I've read almost all of your poems and im still dumbfounded that all of them are so unique! this story was amazing!! 5/5

Very nicely written my dear Darien.. It was like a dark twisted fairy tale, and we all know I love dark. This told a wonderful story that you hear all the time, yet you made it seem like your own... And it had an amazing flow. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

This poem was amazing, you have a very unique way of writting! keep it up! 5/5

Great images in the poem. It makes me feel like I'm right there watching it all happen. Excellent work.

I loved it, great story, wonderful work.
Well done!

Its magical and dark this piece Darien, great use of imagery and you painted a really vivid and somewhat vile picture...but it still had the softness of a love tale within its verses..which made it all that more capitvating - great write :o)

Very interesting poem. Great vocab and descriptions. I will admit it's not as good as your other ones. ^-^

Darien, I love this....the errieness, the darkness of it all, I just love the way you wrote this and the feelings and chills it gave me...5/5

Rhianon

Awe! You used a rhyme that I used. =( Now I feel stupid. Taha!

Anywazzles. This poem rocked! I really really liked the title, it sounded awesome, and then the poem was wow. Really good job, Darien! Loved the ending too. It was a bit like Snow White, I think. Or was it another character? ..I dunno. But I liked it, lol. Keep it up SMAWCE brother! 5/5

Your SMAWCE sister, Natalie. =)

I love when guys can write. I think it's beautiful. And your poem is extremely Amazing!! Great job.

Amberinaa*

SMAWCE brother?!?! Where have you been? It's Nat by the way, lol...

But yeah, stupid downvoters. Every poem I submitted they attacked it, so I'm gonna use this account for a little while, lol..

But where have you been? Lmao! It got so boring around here, taha!

This one was awsome i luv it!! and my name used to b Princess of Darkness.... a 5/5 for me!!

Awh, Darien that was so sad.. I shall find you your true love brave night! LOL! Awh, but I'm serious, that really touched me.. The descriptions were beautiful and amazingly written.. Your choice of words is just brilliant.. I liked how it kind of had the fairytale affect at the end, it was very cute.. Wonderful work, I loved it! xx 5/5

"Poisoned apple a kisses cure"

Kisses is the plural of kiss. The possessive of kiss would be kiss's, but you drop the last s to just kiss'.

I'm kind of a grammar Nazi at my school, so forgive the correction.

I really love the imagery in this poem, I think you do a great job of setting the mood to almost one of disgust or annoyance and not just "dark". *shrug*

This knight has fallen this night
Under her spells and an evil curse
Kiss from true love will wake him
Fix his heart and all will reverse

hey this line was great
i like that and btw this one was great the imaginary was awesome and really the word you said was powerful nice job
the flow was awesome even if the rhyme was quit a little

btw sorry for the late response im just buisy

thanks
Geneross

Hey this is really good i liked the use of words. 5/5
~Kyra~

[This knight has fallen this night]

^^ That line DID confuse me at first, and I had to read it over again, but I got it. Lol.

Great write! There's loads of emotion in it that some people my not be able to see. I liekd how deep and dark it was...Very grabbing to the readers' attention. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I enjoyed this, i thought it was very good.