The Day We Did Love

by Aline   Aug 11, 2006


I had a feeling of passionate love
That drove me to secrets I never feared
And the hands are just holding, holding
Kissing my neck my lips my ear
And the breath so sweet so slow
I'd reach it wherever you shall go
Naked between the ground and the sky
The love you gave just made me fly
Made me cry and cry and cry
For the tears that lingered killed the lie
Killed the sins I once denied
for the pain was a pleasure in my heart in my mind
in the lips licking the body with chime
so passionate so sweet
the feelings just trembled my feet
my heart just screamed
my heart just lived from your touch
from your kiss
from your love that drove me away
and danced with you with every sway
I loved you, I loved you deep
I loved the love you could forever keep
And today I am here you are there
That just seems for our love to be unfair

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  • 18 years ago

    by *Wishes do come true*

    Poem was beuatiful and passionate good job... comment on mines thanks

  • 18 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    I loved you, I loved you deep
    I loved the love you could forever keep
    And today I am here you are there
    That just seems for our love to be unfair
    Aww! I really liked ur poem.. i thought it was very cute and sad at the same time. You are an amazing poet!

  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    Loved the poem... if I may suggest, to add more impact to the poem, seperate the lines into verses and be bold in utilizing breaks to stress the sense of longing and despair. What I mean is this...

    "And the hands are just holding,
    Holding...
    Kissing my neck,
    My lips,
    My ear...
    And the breath...
    So sweet,
    So slow..."

    Same thing can be done throughout the poem to add more punch to the poem. Personal opinion though; otherwise, great write. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Nice poem with deep emotion,
    great job 5/5
    I enjoyed reading it,

  • 18 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Wow.. such emotion and depth. I loved this piece of work, it was amazing! Nicely done.

    -Jennifer. Overall Rating: 4.5/5

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