by LovelyDivine Aug 11, 2006
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Looking into these eyes, |
by Fsams
To fill it's need of hunger. |
I like it, but I think that you should change the word "snack" in the first stanza, it sounds somehow childish. (I don't want to offend you, that's just my opinion). The rest of the poem is amazing and very powerful, the second stanza especially. |
by Nix
It is very interesting. First stanza could be better. I like the topic and I like message of this piece. |
by Drew
I think that those are the best when they come to you, you don`t have to think it`s just there waiting to be written. great poem as always 5/5 |