Aww thats sad...
I lliked the part about the rocks though. Nice discription

A great poem but sad one, deep feelings written as a poem, great job

That is soooo sad..I can relate ALOT to this..i have lost alot of people to deaths...and it is hard but keep your friends and family close you will be surprised how much they can help you..this poem was great very emotional! great job hun keep your head up! im here if ya need me!

I am about ready to CRY. Tears ar in my eyes. Awh. I'm really sorry Hun.. I hope you are alright. ; ;This poem is really sad.

Awwww.. that was so sad.. omg, i hope that has not happened.. this was full of emotion that oozed from every line.. it flowed well and the descriptions were good.. just one thing, in the title and several places throughout the poem it should be "too" not "to".. nice job! 5/5

That's a horrible thing to happen, my friend's dad died this way last month so I can imagine how you must feel.
An emotive write and you got the heartbreaking message across well.
I don't mean to be disrespectful and all but in the title and in a couple of places in the poem it should be "too young."
Thanks for sharing.

Nice poem sad but nice...keep up the good write!!!

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Awwwwwwww that was very very sad. But very touching. You let your emotions out wonderfully but sadly. It's always hard to lose someone you love and care for. But stay close to your friends and family they will always help you thru the tough times! great job!

I like it a lot, very sad. if this occurence was real, im sorry :(

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Very sad, and emotional. it was truly amazingly written. the onyl mistakes were small grammatical and spelling ones. like to instead of too and no apostophe's.. Overall it flowed beautifully and really made me sad..
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I like although it is very sad and depressing! lol! but i couldn't feel the rythm, soz! it was probably just me though! (i is dumb)! but i liked ur poem a yway

Wow, great poem, such intense emotion throughout the whole thing. verry well written, great structure and flow 5/5

I am sorry for your loss. It is always sad to hear about a tragedy like this. It is nice that you have an outlet to express your emotions. keep it up!

Really touching , im sorry