Destination explanation; falling upon heart broken hearts.
Everything being displayed before me upon neat little charts.
[Cliche rhyming..]
All this time my arrogant ways lead to aqua colored tears.
[And a cliche line to match...]

But otherwise, I reallyed enjoyed the poem. It really told an interesting story; some of what I feel some of the time. Very nicely written.. Though since there's only three lines in the last stanza you broke the rhyme scheme...But I think I like it, I'm not sure. :S

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Awwww.. that was so sad.. the descriptions were great, the flow worked well, and the emotion was loud and clear.. wonderful job hunny! 5/5

Creative poem. Great use of words. The first stanza seem to have a different flow than the rest.

I like the repetition and the rhyming pattern. i was going to say u should re-word the 'heart broken hearts' but now iv read it again and decided it does actually fit nicely!

however i do think the last line of the second stanza is too long, u should maybe get rid of the word 'just' ...
and in the last line of the third verse, if u add 'and' (or something like that) at the beginning it will help to balance the two stanzas a bit better.

overall a great job :)

-biscuit-

Thats a nice poem! loved the structure of it!!!

Keep it up!

I loved the poem...but when i got to the last stanza...it just lowered the quality of the poem, maybe i just don't get it but that's my opinion. I still gave it 5/5 because the rest of the poem was so truely amazing that the last stanza didn't even matter soo much. Awesome work!!!

Great poems, Mefan! :] Loved it. You rhymed. ;]]
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..::Heather x Emo With Megan::..

Your excellent!!!!

Heyy, awesome poem, i reallyyyyy liked it! *5

xX-Katherine-Xx

I think that this is excellent, well managed, great use of words. I enjoyed ready it
Thanks
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