God, reall horrible. The flow is good, but the phrases are sometimes to long and don't fit very well.

Uhm, I didn't mean that the poem's horrible. But I guess you noticed that. 4/5 ;)

Dudee . That is AWESOME . Yher REALLY good and there`s a nice flow to it.
Love the use of words . It`s powerfull and it just hits mee . Loves it . Keep it up .
..__MiNDYY

This is a very interesting poem i mean it is pretty much one of the best that i have every read you should really think about writing a book

Omg that so sad. :(

well written and gave an image... but sad :(

I loved it...really hit home

Hmm.. this poem was miving but maybe you should put less emotion in it so the reader can imagine the pain!

Woa.....that was....Uh..Intense. Strong poem too. Very well done. But I think I'm going to have nightmares tonight.
5/5 Still. God Bless.

~*Tay*~

Detail was intense but amazing.

Well written, strong message.

So sad...so beautifully written...
I think you did an excellent job on such a hard topic to write about.
I hope this is fictional...

This is an excellent write a truly sad story filled with pain. u paint a vivid picture with your words u have mad skills girl.

Another good turn... you are very good at capturing a moment.