Very intersting concept.

The only thing I would change is:

My eyes are full of tragic

simply because grammatically it should read My eyes are full of tragedy but it's a minor thing and I like the message you present to me in this.

Nice effort!

NOW THAT WAS GOOD

Edes. LOVE LOVE LOVE this. Poem.
soo true. my friend Tristan gives you 10/10. Loves you girls. ex.oh.ex.

Very good poem. 5/5 It has a great flow to it.

Please return favor and r/r/c some of my poems if you get the chance.