Great job. Thanks for the comments. 5/5
-Kakashi

Cool stuff! i like how the shape of yours turned out so round, even though you kept with the required number of syllables : )

Interesting write, I see a metaphor in there too. I admire your creativeness to use a poetry form like this one. Keep writing.

Ooooh. Another Lanture. Very nice, Jessy. =P ..I need to try one of these, tehe. Loved your choice of wording though, it was amazing. A very good job. Keep it up!! 5/5

Natalie``

Ooo! I like the simple, yet meaningful point to this. =) It does have a point, if you look deeper into it, and I like having to think about what I'm reading, instead of having it right in front of your face. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Even better then the other one! Amazing how you did this... Simply amazing. It flowed so well and told os much in such a little way. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Very creative. I loved this poem. It makes sense and flows too. Ha. Great Job. :]

Woah. Different, creative and definately unique. Short but effective and well written. Wonderful job. 5/5

How did you come up with those forms of poems your style was very unique and simply good and yeah pretty interesting great job

Elegant style, nice use of words.

BEAUTIFUL