A -bit- cliche, not too much though and for your first time it's very good. I'm not sure what else to say, forgive me.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I honestly thought this was good. Since I don't write under various types of poetry, it was a great write for your first time. I understand you want to describe love, so my only suggestions for your next write would be to use stronger and more diverse vocabulary, so your poems could bring a more powerful effect to readers. Keep up the great work, nonetheless, I give it 5.

Hey!
This poem was pretty good for a first time and its nice to see that you're trying out something else...The rhyme was very good...i dont have much words to say how good this is...5/5

Take Care
And
Keep Smiling

Much Love
A.Pathetic.Mistake

Awwww.. that was beautiful! i loved it.. the style seems fun to do too.. might try it one day.. the descriptions were cute and created wonderful imagery.. the flow worked well too.. nice job! 5/5

Aww-- This was beautifuuuuul!! I'm so proud that you gave this type of style a go. To me, it seems like it's be really hard to do. But you've done a great job at it! Excellent hun. Keep it up! Ily. 5/5

Natalie``

I really liked this type of poem, first time I ever read one alike this! :) I like it!
5/5!!

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Most of my poems are like this but more detailed... it wasn't all that interesting yet well written!