Aw! Kaylee! This was so cute. I loved the last stanza! Your flow and rhyming were great as per usual. Such a heartfelt piece. Loved it! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Ooo. I like this one a LOT! The descriptions in it are so precise, and gives the reader an actual image of what exactly you're talking about, which is a great talent to have when writing a poem. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

I really liked it.. I think it would have done a lot better if it had a better flow, but I really loved it... It's a lot different from the other love poems and THAT'S what I love. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I t has a certain something, but to be honest I think that there's a certain something missing, too. I'm not sure what it is, but I know it's there, for me at least.

To swear I long for a cinnamon kiss,
While rasberry lips search your own,
As we await the comming of our dawn,
Could just as well be an understatement.

The laast line, whilst being fine in its own right doesn't fit with the rest of the verse.

Maybe it's the comma in the previous line that joins it in the wrong way. I guess I feel it's a strong enough statement to stand out on its own.

Bret