Comments : Just Me

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    The perfect blond hair that flows down her back,
    Compared to mine-old, ratty and just past my neck.
    Yes, I could be like her,
    Like a complete and total jerk.
    ((Both lines broke the rhyme scheme))

    Otherwise, this was an ok poem. Very cliche with cliche rhyming... I know you can do better.

    xDarkSuicidex 4.5

  • 18 years ago

    by blueknight

    Yeah some words are not approriate to the flow and there are a mispelled words but the idea was great and the sad feelings are there i can also relate to this one good job

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awww, hunny, that was excellent! You go girl, tell him! I'm sure you are just as beautiful as her hun.. The flow in this was pretty good.. The descriptions explained the situation well.. And the emotion in it was very clear..

    Thos are the things that really do scare me.
    ^ Should be "Those" not "Thos"

    Nice job, keep it up! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Razorblade Lies

    I love it, I really do. I think it is great that you can be yourself, not very many people can

  • 18 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Honestly this hasnt got a flow.
    Its all pieced together untidily
    this could be a great poem if you fixed it up.
    Practice makes perfect.
    3/5

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Aww that is sad. Know just how you feel hun. Really heartfelt, the emotion just pours out of it. Flow was a bit rocky and if you could smoothe it out a little I think the poem would have more punch.
    Loved the final stanza though.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    "I should just have to be me."

    You should always be you. Otherwise you would be a poser or a fake. Anyone who puts on an act for another person, doesn't deserve that person. Be yourself, and if they accept you for who you are, then they deserve to be with you. Awesome poem though, it brings up some good points and explanations.

  • 18 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    You shouldn't feel like you have to change for anyone. To me it sounds like you are perfect just the way you are. Your very original and have amazing talent for poetry. I loved it!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A sad poem, with a great message out, it is written so greatly and I really enjoyed reading it, keep it up and 5/5
    great job

  • 18 years ago

    by Juls

    I hope you dont take any of what I say the wrong way:

    I think you should keep to one layout you are all over the place with the stanzas, All them are 4 lines and that its about 8 lines. Maybe break it up a bit. And try this out for the first stanza...

    What does she possess that I do not?
    It's the perfectly shaped body shes got
    She barely fits into those tiny shirts
    They are what scare me the most

    Just a thought. Well other than what I said I liked the poem and just remeber to be yourself

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Great poem Sam, it was really good and true!! I know how you feel, I've been in the same situation plenty of times. xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The poem is kind of cute for a drk poem most of us have experienced a jealous or even a possesive feeling yet not as willing to share it .... great poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I loved it! I have compared myself to others, wanted to be like them. But i realised we should be us, and us only.
    That was really good though, i really liked it, keep it up
    xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by X2892

    Great poem 5/5, u r a very great writer

  • 18 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    Maybe break up your long stanza to be like the other ones. Other wise it does have a good message about those "Perfect" people that others want us to be that aren't exactly as pretty as their appearance.

  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    This was a great poem! it had sad emotions in it as well!

    and well to me.. i know that everyone is pretty in there own way... we dont need to be liks anyone else... everyone is unique!

    Thanks for the comment on my poem it means alot to me!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow you did a wonderful job on this poem. i really like what you were saying in it. and i feel the same way sometimes. it was full with emotion and greatly written. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 18 years ago

    by X2892

    Again i already did this poem a long time ago

  • 18 years ago

    by Clarissa

    Its good to be just you =] really the only way to go
    - Clαяissα ♥

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    The title of the poem was not as good as I think it could be. But that is just my opinion. This poem had a very deep meaning and I can totally understand what you are trying to say. A lot of people compare themselves to other people, but really we don't need to. We are just as God made us, so we shouldnt need to change ourself. Good job with these poems!