Yeah the flow and the alternating of words was great there are so many poems songs itself now and this is one of them ill enjoy reading and yeah sad the rhyme was well and the metaphor helps to make this good

geneross

Great poem. The last stanza was inspirational. I think you can use fill words less.

Don't hurt cause I'm not their physically.
I'm in your heart, and you're in mine
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^^Loved those lines! Megan-- This was another great piece. So many emotions were pouring out as I read it, I just loved it. No need to change a thing. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Oh a very sad poem but so beautifuly written. I really enjoyed reading it, great job like always.5/5

I'm not sure why but I really didn't enjoy reading it... At the beginning you had rhyme and broke it by the second line.. I don't understand why..

xDarkSuicidex 4.5